Mini Lesson: How To Write The Second Sentence Of An IELTS Conclusion
Lesson objective: How to write the second sentence of a conclusion.
In many cities more and more people are choosing to live on their own.
What are the reasons behind this? Is it a positive or negative trend?
In recent years the lives of the inhabitants of large cities has been made more difficult by the number of issues that they routinely face. Personally, I feel governments should urge the public to consider relocating to less crowded towns and the following paragraphs shall outline my reasons for this belief.
The main problem with cities nowadays is the sheer number of people living there creating a variety of serious issues. Firstly, with millions of people all commuting around a city at similar times, traffic congestion has become particularly bad in some cities. This means that employees have to either leave to go to work earlier or find an alternative means of transportation. Secondly, the rise in population levels of cities means that the amount of rubbish created has become almost intolerable. Governments are struggling to provide services to collect all the rubbish and dispose of it in a hygienic environmentally friendly manner increasing risk of disease and levels of pollution.
Allied to the above, with so much unskilled labour in cities these days, wage levels have plummeted, which means the poorer people in cities earn even less than in the past. This could actually be trapping this particular group of people in poverty, possibly for generations to come. For instance, the city of Detroit has experienced a 27% rise in population levels over the last 5 years alone with the percentage of people living in poverty soaring to a a record 35% of the city’s total population, up from 20% over the same time period.
Overall, unemployment, traffic congestion and waste management are the most significant issues faced by city residents nowadays. Governments should do all that they can to encourage people to migrate away from large cities in order to alleviate these issues for the benefit of all.
Teaching Point: The second sentence of your conclusion can be an action point. This means that you could say what should happen next and who is responsible for improving the situation. If you answer these two questions then you will be rounding off your essay really nicely.
Make sure that your conclusion does not include any new points and that it agrees with your body paragraphs. In other words do not change your position/opinion in the conclusion. Make sure you remain of the same view point throughout the essay or else you will lose marks for task achievement.